WRITER: THANKS FOR SHARING YOUR WRITING! YOU ASKED ME TO FOCUS ON
AND DUE DATE, I THOUGHT
WEREN'T QUITE AS IMPORTANT TO FOCUS ON YET; I NOTICED TWO OTHER THINGS THAT I THOUGHT WOULD LEAD TO IMPACTFUL REVISIONS. OVERALL, HERE'S WHAT I FOCUSED ON:
. GIVEN YOUR ASSIGNMENT
.
CAN YOU FOCUS ON ARGUMENT, CONCLUSION, & GRAMMAR? MY PAPER IS DUE IN FIVE DAYS. I ATTACHED THE ASSIGNMENT, TOO. THANKS!
...AGREE THE ARGUMENT ISN'T CLEAR & NOTICE THAT THERE'S NO EVIDENCE FOR MANY CLAIMS AND NO CITATIONS (REQUIRED IN THE ASSIGNMENT FOR THE EVIDENCE THAT IS PROVIDED
DON'T WRITE A TEMPORALLY-SPECIFIC INTRO COMMENT HINTING AT A POTENTIAL, AS-YET DEFINED AGENDA THAT MIGHT EMERGE LATER, MAYBE
BE EXPLICIT ABOUT HOW YOUR MARGINAL COMMENTS WORK IN CONVERSATION WITH YOUR SUMMARY COMMENT
FEEL FREE TO HAVE YOUR INTRODUCTORY COMMENT BE SOLELY FOCUSED ON BUILDING RAPPORT