Rienzi's Prompt Book

Deviations from the MS submitted to the Examiner of Plays

Tracking changes in image snips. 

These slides available from: 

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Act 1

Examiner (EMS)

Prompt Book (PBMS)

EMS 

(cast list doesn't appear in prompt book)

 

PBMS

EMS

PBMS

EMS

PBMS

EMS (exclamation points)

PBMS: calmer punctuation: 1 exclamation point followed by semicolons

EMS

PBMS: stage direction expanded

EMS: exclamation pts and parentheses

PBMS: semicolons and dashes

EMS

PBMS: more explicit stage direction

EMS: "Back to earth / Rebellious stone!" 

PBMS: shortened speech, added stage action ("throwing the stone up I.")

EMS

PBMS

EMS

PBMS (minor incidental)

EMS

PBMS (minor punc changes)

EMS

PBMS: new stage direction 

EMS

PBMS: Elaborate blocking added

PBMS enlarged

EMS

PBMS: deleted (moved?) stage prompt

EMS

PBMS: compressed/deleted/altered stage directions

EMS

PBMS: expanded stage directions: detail physical violence

EMS (”Quick!“)

PBMS (deleted word / altered punct)

EMS

PBMS: added ”!“  and stage direction

Act I Scene 2: EMS

PBMS: added setting (”with a ravelled skein of red worsted“)

EMS

PBMS: altered punct

EMS

PBMS: (added blocking)

EMS

PBMS  (altered caps and punct)

EMS

PBMS (altered punct)

EMS

PBMS (altered punct)

EMS

PBMS: added blocking, stage directions

EMS

PBMS: compressed, punc altered, added stage directions

EMS

PBMS: altered punct, compressed, added stage direction

EMS

PBMS: added stage directions, altered punct

EMS

PBMS: significantly altered punct

EMS

PBMS: stage direction: “Rienzi and Claudia Rise”, altered word (“guard” to “watch”), altered punct

EMS

PBMS: added stage directions, altered punct

Act 2

PBMS: added stage direction

PBMS: added stage direction

PBMS: Stage direction adds movement and urgency to lines

PBMS: added blocking

EMS: “Hast thou read”

PBMS: “Hast read” 

compression

PBMS: added blocking: Rienzi moves to I, on saying “If a truth—”

 

PBMS: more blocking: Rienzi keeps moving as he shifts topics with “Where is Angelo?”

 

PBMS: added stage directions and blocking

PBMS: specific blocking cues

PBMS: added blocking / movement

PBMS: Added stage direction for “All the Citizens”

PBMS: Stage directions give placement clues and make explicit who's being referenced

PBMS: experiments with compressing a passage, reserving the ”cut” portions in pinned sections

PBMS: added stage direction for Citizens

PBMS: added stage directions: communication cue and blocking

PBMS: Added stage direction adds body language: physical connection

PBMS: added stage directions for “All the Citizens”

PBMS: more stage directions for “All the Citizens”

PBMS: Stage direction adds music: ”Military band is heard playing a march without U.C.R”

PBMS: More explicit stage directions

Act 3

EMS

PBMS: added in dialogue: more precise stage direction / blocking

EMS: 1st Citizen

PBMS: changed to 3rd Citizen, added blocking

EMS

PBMS: more precise stage direction/ blocking

EMS

PBMS: emphasis added to “lineal”

EMS

PBMS: altered/reduced stage directions (no shouts)

EMS (note the 2nd Citizen's comment)

PBMS (cut out the 2nd Citizen, stage direction emphasis on crowd shouting)

PBMS: note condition of text for this scene : three fragments pieced together with pins

 

Ready to cut / copy / move 

EMS

PBMS: added blocking; Citizens specific lines reduced to a stage direction: “Shout”

EMS

PBMS: optional compression? State 1:

PBMS: expanded State 2:

EMS

PBMS: added “a Couch in center”, struck out embroidery direction

EMS

PBMS: slight alterations (capitalization, etc); pinned text, apparently an excision from Rienzi's entrance speech later in this scene

EMS: Rienzi's entrance

PBMS (inline: compressed version) 

PBMS: apparently cut portion (pinned to back of this page)

EMS

PBMS: capitalization: “Housewifery”, “Bee”

EMS

PBMS: more capitalization

EMS

PBMS: much compressed (removed middle lines about Claudia learning her power)

PBMS: cut passage pinned to bottom of same page

EMS

PBMS: more precise stage direction

EMS

PBMS: added blocking

EMS

PBMS: incidental changes; altered syntax for ending of Ursini's speech

EMS

PBMS: “droves” changed to “dozens”; punctuation altered

EMS: Angelo: ”Yet he‘s wise;”

PBMS:

Angelo: “Yet he‘s wiser”

added stage directions for Angelo's movements, music outside, blocking for Rienzi's entrance

 

EMS: ”Sir, I come / A suitor to you.”

PBMS: ”Sir, I come / A Suitor to thee,”

Added blocking,  ”Columbs”

EMS

PBMS: stage direction added,

punc changed

EMS

PBMS: added stage direction (movement across the stage closer to Rienzi); 

capitalization of ”Brother” here and throughout Rienzi’s speech, with other cap and punct changes: ”Boy” and ”Justice”)

EMS

PBMS

EMS: ”The Holy Father kneeling”

PBMS: “The Holy Pontiff kneeling”

EMS

PBMS: compressed description of the wife's voice; altered capitalization/punct

EMS

PBMS: compression?

cut marked in quotation marks

EMS

PBMS: note altered caps in Savelli's speech, and altered punct in Colonna's speech

EMS

PBMS: added stage directions

Act 4

PBMS: added blocking. On immediately facing page on left: marked for inclusion: ”A Crimson Chair”

EMS

PBMS: Added blocking

EMS

EMS

PBMS: exclamation point

PBMS: detailed stage directions for exits and entries, some deleted where indicating characters present who should have exited

PBMS: Added stage direction: “(Lords and Ladies sit down)”

EMS

PBMS: added blocking; much reduced speech. (Cut portion pinned to the page, on next slide)

PBMS: Several cut lines, pinned.

EMS

PBMS: altered punct (minor)

EMS

PBMS: Added stage directions; altered punct

EMS

PBMS: exclamation point

PBMS: inserted stage direction above line: ”gives a paper to Rienzi”

EMS

EMS

PBMS: Added blocking

EMS

PBMS:  corrected miscopy?

PBMS: Compressed:

cut passage pinned in quotation marks

PBMS: Added stage direction: “(all rise except Collona)” (sic)

EMS

PBMS: Added stage direction: “(Drinks)”

EMS

PBMS: Compressed Rienzi's speech; cut passage signalled and pinned in quotation marks

EMS

PBMS:  Added lines for Rienzi before the masquers enter: “A fit tale of mirth; / To crown the goblet—!”

Added blocking

 

EMS

EMS

PBMS: altered punct

EMS (Angelo's re-entry): “An thou but...”

PBMS: Added blocking, exclamation point

”An ye but...”

EMS: ”Art frenetic Rienzi?”

PBMS: ”Art frantic, Rienzi?—”

Added blocking

EMS: “—the bold Savelli,”    “knowst”     ”Guilt,”

PBMS: “:—the bold Savilla”   ”knowest,”  “guilt”

more altered punct

EMS: ”Here in my festive home; the mutual cup”

PBMS: “The mutual cup” (deleted half line) 

other punct changes

EMS: passage marked for deletion, metamark pointing to an alternate version

PBMS: much compressed version of deleted passage (preserved parts of EMS highlighted)

PBMS: cut passage (pinned on facing page)

“Did ye think the people could spare their Tribune?”

EMS: alternate passage marked to replace the previous slide's deleted speech by Rienzi

(not represented in PBMS)

“I soar / Too high above ye.”

EMS

PBMS: added stage directions (to distinguish who Angelo means by ”my father”), altered punct

EMS

PBMS: added blocking

EMS

PBMS: Gives Frangipani's question to Ursini as rhetorical question

EMS: “Nay Rome herself”

“Yet thy great father, our good Tribune—”

PBMS: ”and Rome herself—”

“Yet thy good father, our Great Tribune”

added blocking

EMS: “Beseech ye”

PBMS: “Beseech thee”

added blocking

EMS

PBMS

EMS: Rienzi's words at the Lateran church within Savelli’s speech:

PBMS: Added quotation marks to offset Rienzi’s words

EMS

PBMS: altered punct, more detailed stage directions and  blocking

EMS: “the general voice / May hail his successor.”

PBMS: “the general love / May hail his successor.”

EMS: ”Already / Dost weary of the title?”

PBMS: “Already / Dost weary of the title—”

EMS: ”to direct / The royal puppets as my sovran will”

PBMS: signalled compression of Rienzi‘s speech

EMS: conversational Q & A: 

“Well?  /  ”Alas!”

PBMS: ”Well!”

EMS

PBMS: cut line marked inter-lineally, in quotation marks

EMS

PBMS: Added stage directions: “Throws down his Glove” / ”Takes up the Glove”

Altered emphasis/exclamation: 

EMS

PBMS: more specific stage directions: “and nobles”, blocking.

Lady C. specified

EMS

PBMS: Added emphasis

PBMS: added blocking and emphasis

EMS

EMS: “Bear witness to my truth.”

PBMS: “Bear witness to my oath!”

EMS

PBMS: Added blocking

EMS: Claudia asks about Angelo‘s delay

PBMS: Added question from Claudia:

“and wherefore went ye / To the Lateran dear father?”

Compression of Rienzi's answer?

EMS

PBMS: Lines altered, punct changed

EMS

PBMS: added blocking

Act 5

EMS

PBMS: Added stage directions

EMS

PBMS: add word "sooth"

EMS: The “old valiant chief” isn't identified, but suggested by ”pillar” (Colonna)

PBMS:  Adds speech part and speaker to identify Colonna as dead

EMS

PBMS: added stage direction: 

“Rising and advancing”

 

EMS: struck out passage

PBMS: Altered version of cut passage pinned to page

Added: “The Prisoners!” at end of speech

Characters exit in reverse order

EMS

PBMS: added stage direction: “Guarded.”

EMS

PBMS: added blocking

EMS: deleted passage includes ”bold eye”, replaced by ”fidelity”.

PBMS: cut passage pinned to page, indicated in quotation marks

PBMS: “fidelity” struck out and replaced with “bold eye”; metamark indicating cut passage

EMS

PBMS: added stage direction

”Throwing himself into a Chair R”

EMS

PBMS: stage direction 

deleted: ”Falls into Chair R”

added: ”Rising & Advancing to front C”

EMS: Deleted line:

Rienzi: ”To see / Her looks, her tears!”

PBMS: stage directions, some overwritten

PBMS: cut(?) passage pinned to page, with stage directions

EMS: ”They said he was with thee”

PBMS: “They said he was with you”

EMS

PBMS: Added stage direction

EMS: ”let thy beating heart / Be stilled”

PBMS: added line:

“let thy beating heart / Lie upon mine. so shall the mutual pang / Be stilled.”

EMS: long cut speech

PBMS: altered word, and stage direction

EMS

PBMS: refined stage direction 

EMS

PBMS: Added stage direction

EMS: Deleted lines

PBMS: Compressed beyond the deletions in EMS

PBMS: Cut passage pinned to page

EMS: deleted passage

PBMS

EMS

PBMS: Added line; revised stage direction

“sinks at her father's feet”

EMS: “Claudia Colonna! . . .Rouse thee! Help me curse / Him who hath slain thy husband!”

PBMS: heavily revised, cuts or moves? call to Claudia, added lines

PBMS: cut? or optional extension 1, pinned to page

PBMS: cut? or optional extension 1, pinned to page

PBMS: cut? or optional extension 2, pinned to next page

EMS: “Think‘st thou I came here to crush / Yon feeble worm?”

PBMS: Compressed; extended passages marked for insertion

PBMS at this point, multiple pinned passages

PBMS: Adding new speeches for Lady Colonna

EMS: too many exits for Camillo

PBMS: clarified, blocking

EMS

PBMS: More detailed stage directions

EMS

PBMS: quoted passages: possible cuts? 

EMS

PBMS: added passage marked

PBMS: added passage pinned to page

PBMS: “Leads them, and saints revenge in her fierce prayer”

EMS

PBMS:

EMS: signs of earlier ending to this scene

EMS

PBMS: more detailed stage directions

EMS

PBMS: added blocking

EMS: “cold cold grave”

PBMS: “cold grave”

EMS: deleted passage

PBMS

EMS

PBMS: added stage directions: “Through the Gate in the Centre of the Flat”

EMS

PBMS: abbreviated ending, with optional expansion?

PBMS: Expanded version pinned to page

PBMS: “Disposition of the Characters at the fall of the Curtain”

MRM Rienzi Prompt Book vs Examiner's Office MS

By Elisa Beshero-Bondar

MRM Rienzi Prompt Book vs Examiner's Office MS

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